Many people in business heaved a sigh of relief when email began
to take over most of their day-to-day correspondence. Processing
business letters - even today - is fiddly and fussy, compared with the
blissful simplicity of email.
However as you know there are still
times when ink on paper is essential. Many of the so-called
"professions" (legal, accountancy, etc) in the UK at least still insist
on correspondence being done via printed letters. They have a deep
mistrust of email and for good reason, as its confidentiality can never
be guaranteed. Business letters are at least fairly private - you have
to assume it's easier and faster to snoop on email than it is to steam
envelopes open over boiling water.
In other instances, too,
printed letters provide a more tamper-proof formal record of business
arrangements, complaints, employee warnings/terminations and other
issues that need to be carved into tablets of stone. (Well, paper,
anyway.)
Old fashioned structure, modern style
Highlighted
and ridiculed by the casual nature of email, the quaint formality of
the old fashioned business letter seems positively Dickensian and
totally inappropriate for the way we do business now.
There is an
answer, though. Use the formality of structure that makes the business
letter the bullet-proof form of communication it has come to be. Combine
that with the short, straight-talking style of writing more common to
emails, and you have a good compromise.
Let's start with the structure - or rather, the etiquette which supplies the structure.
There
are variations between accepted etiquette used in the different English
language markets. Here are the main British forms of address. I have
also included the US/Canadian equivalents where I know them, but I'm
afraid I'm not aware of those used in Australia, NZ or SA.
Formal letters
The
addressee will either be a title, e.g. "The Chief Executive Officer" or
to an organization or company when you don't know to whom your letter
should be addressed. When you write to a title the salutation is "Dear
Sir," "Dear Madam," or if you want to play it safe, "Dear Sir/Madam."
When you write to an organization it's "Dear Sirs," Dear "Mesdames," or
again if you want to play it safe (but labor the point) "Dear
Sirs/Mesdames."
Your sign off will be "Yours faithfully" (UK) or "Yours truly" (US and Canada.)
Less formal letters
This
is where you have a name. And this is where you can get into hot water
if you're not sure of the gender of the person. Someone called J C
Jennings could be a Jack or a Joanna. Someone called Leslie Matthews
could also be either (traditionally the female version of the name is
spelled "Lesley" and the male "Leslie," but I know at least one lady
Leslie.)
Equally beware of unisex names like Jody, Jo, Bobbie,
Alex, Rob, Robin, Carol (yes, really,) Billie, Chris, Darryl, Eddie,
Sam, Jackie, Nicky, Frances (f) vs Francis (m), Freddie, Gabrielle (f)
vs Gabriel (m), Georgie, Gerry/Jerry, Charlie, Nat, Harry, Jessie (f) vs
Jesse (m), Stevie, Mel, Pat, Ronnie, Sacha, Sandy, etc. And that's
before we get started on names from non English-language cultures.
People
these days usually don't advertise whether they're "Mr" or "Ms" or
whatever. When in doubt don't risk embarrassment; phone the organization
concerned and ask.
Some people borrow an awful technique from
email and use a person's whole name in the salutation, e.g. "Dear Suzan
St Maur." I don't know about you, but this irritates the h*ll out of me
and I would not recommend it.
So, when your letter is addressed to
"Mr J C Jennings" your salutation is "Dear Mr Jennings." If the
information you have is simply "Joanna C Jennings" you can probably take
a chance and write a salutation of "Dear Ms Jennings." I don't know
many male Joannas, but don't count on it...
Your sign off will be "Yours sincerely."
Even less formal letters
This
is where the internet's influence can be allowed to come into it and
give you some freedom from the formalities expected in, well, more
formal letters.
If you're writing to someone whom you know on
first name terms then your salutation is going to be "Dear (name)" and
you don't need to sign off with a "yours" anything unless you
particularly want to. Common forms of sign off include "warm regards"
(US,) "kind regards," "best wishes," etc.
Layout
This
isn't as strictly followed as it used to be, and now it's considered OK
to design the layout of a letter around the design of the company
letterhead. The elements you need, wherever you put them, should
include:
Your company name and address (usually done in the letterhead's design)
The date
The addressee's name, title, company name and address
The salutation ("dear so-and-so")
The topic of the letter ("re:" whatever)
The body of the letter
The sign off ("Yours whatever")
Your own name and title
The date
The addressee's name, title, company name and address
The salutation ("dear so-and-so")
The topic of the letter ("re:" whatever)
The body of the letter
The sign off ("Yours whatever")
Your own name and title
Traditionally, your own address should
go at the top right of the letter, with the date underneath it on the
right. On the next line at the left margin, you put the addressee's name
and address. After one or two spaces, the "Dear (whoever)" goes
underneath that. Two spaces below that, you can put your "re: (topic)"
or just the topic in bold and/or underlined.
Once you've done the
body of the letter, create one or two spaces and put the sign-off either
ranged left or indented a few tabs along towards the right. Create a
sufficient number of spaces for your signature and then key in your name
(and title if appropriate) so it starts directly under the "Y" of
"Yours."
If your letter goes on to a second page, where it breaks
on page 1 create a space then to the right key in "cont'd." You can
start page 2 just by keying in "page 2" and starting again two or three
spaces below. Some people create a mini-heading for the second page with
the addressee's name on the left, the date in the middle, and the page
number on the right, followed by an underline that crosses the whole
page. This is useful if the two pages become detached from one another.
Okay. Now we've established the ground rules, what do we say?
Keep the style sharp and simple
Business
letters are not literary works. They are verbal workhorses with a
purpose only to convey information, and what you want the reader to do
with it, as quickly and clearly as possible.
Start by making notes
as if to yourself. These notes will come out in a direct style
naturally, because you're not intimidated or disquieted when writing to
yourself. Don't restrict yourself to a structure at this stage. Just
write out everything you can think of that should go into the letter.
Now, match your notes to the sequence in one of the "skeletons" described below. Discard any notes that aren't relevant.
If
you build up your letter along these lines you'll find that your style
is clear and straightforward, with no unnecessary adjectives, adverbs,
business phrases, "corporate speak" or other business BS that some
people use in business letters.
All you need to do then is tidy up
with a good edit and spelling and grammar check. (Although many people
take a lenient view over spelling and grammatical mistakes in emails,
they stick out like sore thumbs in printed letters and make you look
very amateurish.)
Build your content on a "skeleton"
Normally
you'll identify the topic of the letter with "re: Your Outstanding
Account" or less formally, "Your Outstanding Account" in bold and/or
underlined. Then make notes or bullet points of the main issues you need
to include, on a skeleton like this:
Typically, these would be:
1. Background
I see from our records that you were first invoiced for this amount four months ago and statements have been sent out to you each month since then
I see from our records that you were first invoiced for this amount four months ago and statements have been sent out to you each month since then
2. The sticky issue
This can't go on, especially as you haven't contacted us to discuss extending your credit
3. What I want to happen now
Pay up in the next seven days
Pay up in the next seven days
4. Or else
We will be obliged to start legal proceedings against you
We will be obliged to start legal proceedings against you
5. Sweetener
If you do pay up by return, we won't take any further action and will restart your 30 days' credit as before
6. Next move
Please contact me urgently and let me know what you intend to do
Same skeleton, different content
You
could use this skeleton for a number of business letter purposes. Not
all business letters have you sitting so comfortably in the driving
seat, however. Let's say you were the recipient of this letter and want
to winkle out more time to pay. The elements remain the same, but we
approach from a different angle...
1. Background
Thank you for bringing this to my attention - I had no idea we were so late paying
Thank you for bringing this to my attention - I had no idea we were so late paying
2. The sticky issue
We're experiencing serious cashflow problems at the moment but
we have taken steps to rectify this and anticipate the problem will be
solved in the next 3 weeks
3. What I want to happen now
Would you consider extending our credit for a while longer, perhaps with interest being chargeable at a rate we can agree?
Would you consider extending our credit for a while longer, perhaps with interest being chargeable at a rate we can agree?
4. Or else
We really would like to continue buying our supplies from you
but if we enter into a dispute the goodwill will be lost and our
business relationship will be over
5. Sweetener
I can assure you our cashflow problem is temporary and we want to preserve our business relationship with you if possible
I can assure you our cashflow problem is temporary and we want to preserve our business relationship with you if possible
6. Next move
I will phone you in the next few days to discuss payment terms
Build your own skeleton
Obviously
that 6-point skeleton isn't going to work for every business letter,
but a shortened version of it will be useful because you can build it
back up so it's tailored to any number of different needs. Here's the
basic one that I use:
1. Background
2. The key issue
3. What will or should happen
4. What to do next
2. The key issue
3. What will or should happen
4. What to do next
Any further tips? Only that business
letters should always be as short as possible. That's not as simple as
it sounds. Somebody famous (can't remember who) once apologized for
writing someone a long letter, as he didn't have time to write a short
one. It's hard to write concisely, but if you use the style and skeleton
tips above you'll find it somewhat easier.
If you need to go into
detail, separate that off into a different (but attached) document and
use the letter only as a summary of the issue and a call to action.
I'm
no social psychologist so I can't quote you a scientific reason, but
separating detail from key points usually means that both get read more
thoroughly. It's probably because by separating the two elements you
provide readers with more digestible looking chunks. Anyway, it works!
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